by Shardae

Instead of saying:

The wind blew through the trees rapidly.

Say. . .

The wind, sneaky and stealth, creeped up on the unsuspecting leaves and ruffled them. The leaves were dazed and confused until the wind settled down.

Which one sounds better?
Personification helps paint a better picture in the reader's mind. It also gives the story more personality and more voice.

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May 15, 2009
One thing...
by: Anonymous

One thing that I have to comment on, is that you don't want to be too flashy with your words either. If you go too far in your writing with detail, you'll find your reader becoming bored...and they will most likely move onto another story. Too many words - just like when your talking - will lose peoples attentions quickly.

Otherwise, its fine to do a little bit of dabbing here and there, but you just don't want to go over board with your detailing.

Simple but sophisticated is better then extravagent and uninteresting.

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